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學測指考英文寫作 – The Most Successful Man in the World (by 12^th grader)

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The Most Successful Man in the World

Jerry Han – the 12^th grader

Many achievements stand the value of our life such as how many inventions we made, how much money we have earned, and how many houses we have. But what makes a person's life indispensable and successful is not depend on how much value we have accumulated but how much we leave to the world.

Every time, if you ask a child "Where do you want to go on holiday without limitation of funds?" Most of them will answer Disney Land with shinney eyes. I have been to three different Disney Land in the USA, Japan, and Hong Kong. All of them gave me the best memory in my childhood which is beyond comparable. Apparently I was one of the kids who want to go to Disney Land. Not only Disney Land but also Micky Mouse who played a pivotal role in children's growing comes from Walt Disney. He is the man bringing laughter and joy to the kids all over the world. Even now, the time he passed away for many years, there's no other amusement parks can beat Disney Land. I can't imagine the world with Disney Land where each children must to go in their childhood.

I think if Walt Disney is the second successful person, no one can be the first. Just pay a visit to any one of the Disney Lands. When you see the gorgeous castle living Micky shaking hands with tourists and the amusement park's parking lot without edge. You will know what I mean.

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The Most Successful Man in the World

Jerry Han – the 12^th grader

The value of our life can be seen in the form of many achievements such as inventions we made, money we have earned, and houses we have. But what makes a person's life indispensable (important/meaningful) and successful depends not on what we have but on what we leave the world.

Without any hesitation, most of the kids will say "Disneyland." every time we ask a kid where he or she is keen to go on a holiday. I have been to three different amusement parks of Disneyland in the USA, Japan, and Hong Kong. These amusement parks left me the best memory in my childhood, which is beyond comparison and description. Apparently I was one of the kids as well who yearned to go to Disneyland. No matter who they are now, when they were in their childhood, the majority of them had been accompanied by some of wonderful and amazing characters like Donald Duck, Mickey Mouse, Snow White, and other amazing characters from Disneyland. All of these works and wonders not only in Disneyland amusement parks but also in Disneyland movies are created by a great master called Walt Disney. He is the man who has brought laughter and joy to the kids. Adults and teenagers are no exception. He is the wizard who lets happiness spread all over the world. Even now, the genius passed away for years. There haven't been any other amusement parks can beat Disneyland. I can't imagine what our children's childhood would be if there were no Disneyland in our planet.

If we talk about the most successful man in the world, Walt Disney will be second to none. Pay a visit to any one of the Disneyland's amusement parks. When you are there, you can see a sea of tourists coming from all over the world. In a gorgeous castle lives Mickey shaking hands with them. They laugh and smile everywhere. If possible, you just stand at one side of its parking lot full of cars, you can't see the end of the other side and you will know what I mean then - everyone is looking for happiness there. This is what the most successful man has left to you, me, and the world.