學測指考英文寫作 – A Dream - 3 (by 12th grader)

 

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A Dream (by 12th grader)

Jackie Lee – the 12th grader

 

Being a senior high school student, I have a lot of things need to do.  Despite the hard studying takes me lots of time, never forget my dream - I want to be an engineer, who can design the house and make a comfortable place that gives people a chance to relax.  As an engineer, I will try my best to make the building more fascinating and comfortable.  I prefer to go to the poor countries which need my help.

 

For instance, I can build a hospital or a school for them instead of giving them money.  Eventually, if I want to make my dream come true, I need to study hard and enter in an university which can teach me how to be an engineer.

 

 

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A Dream (by 12th grader)

Jackie Lee – the 12th grader

 

As a senior high school student, I have a lot of things to do.  Although studying hard takes me lots of time and effort, I never forget my dream - being an outstanding architect, who can design a house having a comfortable space providing people with a place to relax. 

 

When I become an excellent architect one day, I will try my best to have people live in spacious and cozy buildings instead of crowded and small apartments.  Moreover, if possible, I prefer to go to the underdeveloped countries where their people need my help.  For instance, I can build a hospital or a school for them rather than giving them money.  Of course, if I want to make my dream come true, I will definitely need to study hard to enter a university where I can get educated to learn how to be a qualified and brilliant architect.

 

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