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學測指考英文寫作 – Pandas and My Black Eye (by 12^th grader)

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Pandas and My Black Eye (by 12^th grader)

Simba Chang - the 12^th grader

Last Sunday, Pandas arrived at the zoo in our city.  So interested in these lovely animals was I, that I went to the zoo thirty minutes before its opening.  To my disappointment, there were already many Panda lovers just as me standing in a long line. Couldn’t bear to stand in line for such a long time in a hot sunny day, I chose to worst choice I had ever made, cutting in line.  When I did this, I felt that many people angrily stared at =me, some of who even blamed me for my selfish behavior.  As embarrassed as I was then, I still didn’t admit my fault ad stood in the same place with guilty.  Not until someone punched on my eye furiously did I get a real punishment.  Eventually, I still got into the zoo and saw the pandas.  But it seems like everyone as well as the pandas were laughing at my black eye.

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Pandas and My Black Eye (by 12^th grader)

Simba Chang - the 12^th grader

Last Sunday, Pandas arrived at the zoo in our city.  So interested in these lovely animals was I, that I went to the zoo thirty minutes before its opening.

To my disappointment, there were already many Panda fans just like me standing in a long line.  Unable to bear to stand in line for such a long time in a hot sunny day, I made an unwise choice which was the worst one I had ever had, cutting in line.  When I did this, I felt that many people angrily stared at me, some of who even blamed me for my selfish behavior. 

As embarrassed as I was then, I stood still and didn’t do anything.  Not until there was someone coming up to me giving me a punch on my face furiously did I get a real punishment.  Eventually, I got into the zoo and saw the pandas.  But it seemed everyone as well as the pandas was laughing at me because of my black eye.