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學測指考英文寫作 – Happiness or Success (by 6^th grader)

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Happiness or Success (by 6^th grader)

Julie – the 6^th grader

Everyone wants to have happiness and success at the same time, but under certain circumstances, you have to make a decision between happiness and success.  In order to earn more money and to be success, you need to working harder and sacrifice the time which you can do whatever you want to.  On the contrary, if you want to enjoy a happy life, you might not to care too much about how much money you earn or how successful other people are.  That is, suppose you care about these, you might lead a live full of stress and worry, which means an unhappy life.

Most of the people might choose success because success will bring a lot of wealth and fame for you.  It seems like as long as you are a success people, everything you want to have will belong to you, and it also represents the arrival of happiness.

But the wiser choice is to choose happiness and enjoy your life immediately.  In fact, sometimes we won’t become successful even if we work very hard.  You might be upset if you only care about how much you time you have paid and what you receive in the end.  Besides, the price you pay for success must be your youth, or even your health.  So when success maybe, you are too old and too weak to do the things you want to do before.  It is sad that you can’t enjoy your life when you are young.  No matter you are success or not.

Successful isn’t every thing.  While you can enjoy every day happily without money and fame, you actually are the winner of life.

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Happiness or Success (by 6^th grader)

Julie – the 6^th grader

Everyone wants to have happiness and success at the same time.  But under certain circumstances, you have to make a choice between happiness and success.  In order to be successful because success will bring wealth and fame to you, you need to work hard and sacrifice the time which you can use to do whatever you want to.  On the contrary, if you want to enjoy a happy life, you might not want to care too much about how successful you are and how much money you earn.  That is, suppose you care about these particularly, you might lead a life full of stress and worry, which means an unhappy life.

Nowadays, a lot of the people might choose success in the hope of their prosperity.  It seems as long as they are successful people, everything they want will belong to them, and it also stands for the arrival of happiness.  As everybody knows, they can have a short period of happiness which won’t last for a long time because they’re desperate to want more and their desire won’t end.

But the wiser choice is to choose happiness and truly enjoy your life.  In fact, sometimes you won’t become successful even if you work very hard.  You might end up being upset when you only care about how much time and effort you have spent and what you have obtained.  Besides, the price you have paid for success must be your youth, or even your health.  So, when you become successful, you might be too old and weak to do the things you have longed for.  It is sad that you can’t really enjoy your life with your family when you are young or middle-aged. 

Being successful isn’t everything.  Instead of tightly getting hold of fortune and reputation which are derived from success, you can much easier enjoy your life happily, which makes you the winner of your life.