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學測指考英文寫作 – Sandy’s Birthday  (by 10^th grader)

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Sandy’s Birthday (by 10^th grader)

Melody – 10^th grader

My best friend Sandy’s birthday is about to come.  I want to hold a wonderful party for her, so I call my friends and we get together to discuss about how to celebrate and make her surprised.

On the important day, we hide in Sandy’s apartment preparing for the party.  During our preparation, we make a big delicious cake.  As two hours go by, it’s six o’clock.  Sandy comes home directly after work.  As soon as she opens the door and walks into the living room, we all show up and yell, “Happy Birthday to you!”  It really makes Sandy surprised.

Walking toward her with the cake, I see some tears burst out with her eyes.  Immediately, my legs trip the other.  The cake sliding out and hit on Sandy’s face.  Out of our expectation, she doesn’t get angry and laughs, “Oh! This cake has a little exciting!”

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Sandy’s Birthday (by 10^th grader)

Melody – 10^th grader

Sandy is my best friend whose birthday is about to come.  I want to hold a wonderful party for her.  So I call our friends, and we get together to discuss about how to celebrate and make her surprised.

On the important day, eleven people hide in Sandy’s apartment preparing for the party.  During our preparation, we bake two delicious cakes.  As hours go by, finally, it’s about six twenty.  She comes home directly after work.  As soon as she opens the door and walks into the living room, we all jump out and yell, “Happy Birthday to you, Sandy!”  It really surprises her and makes her unable to say a single word.  At the same time, it brings slight tears to her eyes. 

After we all sit down, I hold one of the cakes, walking over to her.  Suddenly, something happens.  My feet trip over each other which has the cake thrown out onto Sandy’s face.  Out of our surprise, instead of getting angry, she laughs out loud, “Oh!  It’s a big surprising cake!”  We help her to clean up immediately.  Of course, one cake can’t satisfy us, and we order pizza.  With delicious cake and tasty pizza on the table and joyful chatting and happy laughter in the air, we spend a wonderful evening with Sandy.