學測指考英文寫作A Cockroach in the Bathroom (by 9th grader)

 

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A Cockroach in the Bathroom

Tammy Lai – the 9th grader

 

"Oh, yes! It's finally Friday!" Helen said to herself and walked slowly with her tired out body into her apartment. Getting through lots of work and not having much rest, she decided to have a hot bath. She went into the bathroom and soaked herself in the tub which was full of hot water. With the light music on, she enjoyed the peaceful moment without any disturbance for a while. But suddenly, she got cold feet for she saw a big cockroach on the wall. She used to cry for help. But this time she decided to stand up to it because there was no one around. She picked up one of her slippers and walked quietly toward the cockroach. When she was about to give it a deadly hit, she lost her balance, which made her fall into the tub. The cockroach ran away and water splashed all over the bathroom. It was in a mess. It took Helen an hour to clean up. She couldn't believe she ended up much more exhausted!

 

 

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A Cockroach in the Bathroom

Tammy Lai – the 9th grader

 

"Oh, yes! It's finally Friday!" Helen said to herself and dragged her tired body back to her apartment. Getting through lots of work and not having much rest, she decided to have a hot bath. She went into the bathroom and soaked herself in the tub full of hot water. With the light music on, she enjoyed the peaceful moment without any disturbance for a while. Suddenly, she got cold feet for she saw a big and dark brown cockroach on the wall. She used to cry for help. However this time she decided to stand up to it since there was no one around. One of her slippers was picked up slowly and she walked quietly toward the cockroach. When being about to give it a deadly hit, she lost her balance, which made her fall into the tub. Needless to, the cockroach ran away quickly. What was worse, water splashed all over the bathroom. It left Helen no choice but to clean it up the following hour. She couldn't believe she ended up much more exhausted!

 

 

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