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學測指考英文寫作 – 甩掉你的習慣 而不是你的手機  (by 12^th grader)

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甩掉你的習慣 而不是你的手機 (by 12^th grader)

Thomas – 12^th grader

In modern society, cellphones have already played an indispensable role in our daily lives.  For some people, cellphones are tools.  They use cellphones to meet their daily necessities, such as contacting with others, learning some breaking news, taking pictures, and so on.  However, for those who are addicted to the device, this convenient gadget has become drugs, which means they rely on it so much that they can’t live without it.  This is a serious problem in our society.  When addicted to cellphones, people will be engrossed in them and neglect what happens around them, which may lead to an indifferent society.  What’s worse, it will impact people’s working efficiency, since their concentration is lower than before.  As for me, I admit that I depend on cellphone very much, yet I don’t think that I’m addicted to it.  Everyday I watch videos and follow the latest news about my favorite NBA teams.  However, when I study or concentrate on something else, I still act normally.

Although it doesn’t pose threat to me, I think I should use it prudently since I still spend too much time on it.  When taking on the challenge, I come up with several ideas.  The first step is to keep it away from me while I’m studying, so I won’t be able to get it easily.  Simple as the tip seems, it is quite effective.  Next, it is important to finish my work on schedule before I indulge myself in it.  By doing so, it won’t be an obstacle in my life.  Last but not least, deleting meaningless apps from the phone is important, since they just waste my time.  As time pass by, more and more gadgets will come into our lives.  Were it not for the cutting edge technology, the modern society wouldn’t become more convenient.  Therefore, we shouldn’t blame for the development of cellphones, but inspect our habits.  With determination, we can surmount every challenge, and prevent ourselves from becoming the slave of technology.

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甩掉你的習慣 而不是你的手機 (by 12^th grader)

Thomas – 12^th grader

In a modern society, cellphones have already played an indispensable role in our daily lives.  For some people, cellphones are tools.  They use them to help them do their daily activities, such as contacting others, watching news, taking pictures, and so on.  However, for those who are addicted to the device, this convenient gadget has become kind of drugs, which means they rely on it so much that they can’t even live without it.  This causes a serious problem in our society.  When obsessed with cellphones, people will be engrossed in them and neglect what happens around them, which may lead to an indifferent society.  What’s worse, it will have a serious impact on people’s work since their concentration is lower than before.  As for me, I admit that I depend on my cellphone very much, and yet I don’t think I’m addicted to it because I use it daily to watch videos and follow the latest news about my favorite NBA teams.  However, when I study or concentrate on something else, I’ll put it aside still act normally.

Although my cellphone doesn’t pose any threat to me, I think I should use it prudently and smartly since I still spend quite a lot of time on it.  When taking on this challenge, I come up with several ways to deal with it.  First, keep it away from me while studying at school and doing homework at home, so I won’t be able to have it easily.  As simple as the tip seems, it is quite effective.  Next, finish my work on schedule before I indulge myself in it.  By doing so, it won’t become an obstacle during every school day.  Last but not least, delete meaningless apps since they just waste my time if use them.  As time passes by, more and more gadgets will come into our lives.  Were it not for the cutting edge technology, the modern society wouldn’t become more convenient.  Therefore, we shouldn’t blame for the development of the cellphone, but do proper adjustment to our habits of using the small intelligent gadget to keep us from being indulged in it.  With determination, we can surmount every challenge on our way to the future success, and prevent ourselves from becoming the slave of technology.