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學測指考英文寫作 – Friendship

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Friendship

In our daily life, friendship is an important thing to us.  The reason why it is necessary for us is that we often need others help when we do some project with them.  Therefore, I have a method to remain my friendship with my friends.

First, we need to pay attention to our friends when they are talking.  No matter how good or bad their idea is, we need to listen to them.  It shows that we focus on what they are saying and it will make them feel fulfillment.  As a senior high school student, I join a club which can let everyone discuss the plot of their favorite books.  When we have a meeting to share our ideas to others, I always shut off my mouth and listen to what others are talking about, which lets me make friends with many people.  They think what I have done gives them a lot of courage and lets them feel good.

Because of my method, I make many friends and our friendship remain very hard.  I think it is the respect I give to my friends leads to the result.

評語：

1.  結論太短。

2. 不清楚二個動詞remain與maintain的使用。

3.  還有少許文法錯誤。

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Friendship

In our daily life, friendship is an important thing to us.  The reason why it is indispensable for us is that we often need help from others when we do some projects with them or we feel down.  In order to maintain good friendship with my friends, I have a wonderful way to deal with it. 

First, we need to pay attention to our friends when they are talking or saying something to us.  Whether their ideas are good and practical or not, we’ll listen to them carefully.  It shows that we focus on and care about what they are saying, and in the meantime, it will make them pleased and comfortable.  As a senior high school student, I join a reading club which can let club members discuss the plots of their favorite books.  Whenever we have a meeting to share our ideas with others, I always attentively listen to what others are talking about, which in turn can let me make a lot of friends since what I do will not only give them a lot of confidence and courage but also make them feel fulfilled.

Because of the above mentioned way I have adopted, I really make many friends and maintain the friendship quite well.  I think it is the respect I give to my friends leads to the good relationship with them.