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Money Makes the World Go Around

Sunny

What does the saying "Money Makes the World Go Around" mean?  That is, money is extremely important to the whole world.  And this sentence is probably the most typical portrayal of our current generation.  Why do you say that?  Because almost everything you use and do in life is related to money.  For example, if you want to invest in a company, or buy a birthday gift for a friend, etc.

From the above point of view, money occupies a very important position in our lives.  Because the status of money has risen in people's minds, many people's life goals have become money-making rather than childhood dreams, and some people can even desperate for money.  However, it is worth mentioning that many people work hard in pursuit of money, which has created the advancement of society and technology, and invented many convenient tools to allow humans to make money faster.

When it comes to the position of money in my mind, there are also the top three, because without it, it means that I can't buy what I want.  Having said that, I think that when I become an adult and need to go out to find a job on my own, money will definitely rank higher than it is now, because now the expenses for pocket money or necessities come from my parents' work income.

Finally, I think that money is an indispensable necessity in our age, but if you want to say the most important thing, I think it is still happy.  The times are advancing too fast, and the pace of urbanites is also changing faster and faster.  If you work hard all day to make money, what you lose may even be more important than money.

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Money Makes the World Go Around

Sunny

What does the saying "Money Makes the World Go Around" mean?  That is, money is extremely important to the whole world.  And this phrase is probably the most typical portrayal of our current generation because almost everything you use and do in your life has a lot to do with money, such as your investment in a company, and buying a birthday gift for a friend, etc.

From the above point of view, money occupies a very important position in our lives because money in people's minds becomes more and more crucial.  Therefore, instead of a dream in a childhood, many people's life goal is to make as much money as they can.  What’s more, it is worth mentioning that since many people work hard in pursuit of money, it has created the advancement of society and technology, and invented many convenient tools to allow humans to make money faster and live a more comfortable life.

When it comes to money in my mind, it is my top priority.  Even I say making money is not my first priority, but I think when I become an adult and need to find a job on my own, money will definitely rank higher than it is now, because my pocket money and necessities come from my parents' income now.

Finally, I think that money is an indispensable necessity of our age, but if you want to say the most important thing in my life, I think it is happiness and health.  Since time flies, you have no choice but to work hard all day to make money to have a better future.  But, do you think what you lose may even be far more important than money?