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學測指考英文寫作 – A Letter to My Friend  

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A Letter to My Friend

Melody – the 12^th grader

Dear Barbie,

        I know that you have gone through some terrible days, since your parents often scolded you. I understand the feeling you feel now. However, I think you can change the way you think. Your parents  did this because they are concerned about you, wanting you to go back to your normal life. Indulging yourself in playing online video games for nearly two months, you not only ignore your study but also your health. Which makes them so worried that they have no choice but to notice you in a fierce way. And I also worried about you too. I have seen you go to school with dark circles around your eyes for several weeks. In addition, you nodded off in every class. As your friend, I suggest you stop playing the game, because it has a huge negative influence on your life. 

        You might be very angry when you read this letter, and you might think I just like your parents. But, please believe me, letting the online game go so that your life would go back to normal and become better. Hard as it is to quit addiction, I will help you to overcome this difficulty. We can go to the library and study together whenever you want, and we can also play your favorite sport, badminton, after school. By doing so, I believe we can have a good time, and your parents will also stop being mad at you. Doesn’t it sound great? If you want to make a change, please tell me, and I will accompany you. No matter what obstacles you encounter, I will help you overcome it, since I am always by your side. 

                                                                                                             Sincerely,

                                                                                                                 Jill.

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A Letter to My Friend

Melody – the 12^th grader

Dear Barbie,

        I know that you have gone through some terrible days since your parents often scolded you.  I understand the feeling you have now.  You might think it is awful.  However, I think you can change the way you think.  What your parents have done is because they worry about you, wanting you to go back to your normal life.  Having been indulging yourself in playing online video games for nearly two months, you have ignored not only your study but also your health, which makes them so worried that they have no choice but to warn you in a serious way.  And I worried about you too.  I have seen you go to school with dark circles around your eyes for several weeks.  In addition, you nodded off in almost every class.  As your best friend, I suggest you stop playing the games because it has a huge negative influence on your life. 

        You might be very angry when you read this letter, and you might think I just like your parents.  But, please trust me to let go of the online games so that your life would go back to normal and might become even better.  Hard as it is to quit an addiction, I will help you to overcome this difficulty.  We can go to the library to study whenever you want, and after school, we can also play your favorite sport, badminton.  By doing so, I believe we can have a good time studying and playing together, and instead of getting mad at you, your parents will be happy that you get back on the right track.  Doesn’t it sound great? 

If you determine to make a big change, I’ll always be by your side to help you weather whatever obstacles you encounter.  If you persevere in getting rid of online game addiction, your high school life will be as colorful as mine.  Only with strong determination and sheer perseverance can you make it.

                                                                                                              Sincerely yours

                                                                                                               Jill