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英文寫作 – An Unforgettable Thing

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An Unforgettable Thing

Hunter Wang – the ninth grader

When I was in grade eight, my classmate invited me to go to a paintball game. I thought it was excited, so I accepted his invitation. It was first I played the paintball game. When I shot enemies, I felt great and excited. If wanted to win the game, we needed a plan. The plan that we made let us win each paintball game. At last, we became champion. This was an unforgettable thing to me.

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An Unforgettable Thing

Hunter Wang – the ninth grader

When I was in grade eight, one of my classmates invited me to play paintball. I thought it was exciting, so I accepted his invitation. It was my first time to play paintball. In the game, I felt great and excited when I shot enemies. But we needed a plan if wanted to win the game. We were glad that the plan worked. It let us defeat other teams, and we won the champion finally. This was an unforgettable thing to me.