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學測指考英文寫作 – Sing Love Songs

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Sing Love Songs

Julie Chen – the 12^th grader

On a beautiful night, the moon was very bright.  Tom wanted to show his affection for the girl who he loved.  Therefore, he sang with his guitar under the apartment she lived.  Because the music was too loud and he was not good at singing, many residents were angry.  The noise attracted the girl and her roommate.  The girl opened the window and looked down.  Her roommate also wanted to see but she put her hand on the windowsill, she accidentally pushed the potted plant down.  Fortunately, no one got hurt.  It scared Tom because he thought someone was so mad that he wanted to kill him.  Thus, Tom ran away as fast as he could.

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Sing Love Songs

Julie Chen – the 12^th grader

On a beautiful night, the moon was up in the sky shining brightly.  Tom wanted to show his affection for Jennifer, the girl he loved.  Therefore, he went to her apartment which was in a 20-storied building.  In front of her apartment tower, he played his guitar singing love songs for her.  However, it became a distracting music because of his inharmonic melody with his coarse and harsh sound, which made many residents in the tower angry.  In the meantime, the noise attracted Jennifer and her roommate.  They opened the window, looking down, and putting her hands on the windowsill.  But, she touched something on it accidentally.  It was the pot plant that fell down to the ground.  Fortunately, no one got hurt.  It scared Tom because he thought his music drove somebody crazy to kill him unhesitatingly.  Without looking up to see who that person was, he ran away as fast as he could and disappeared in the dark streets.