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學測指考英文寫作 – A Cockroach on The Wall  (by 7^th grader)

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A Cockroach on The Wall (by 7^th grader)

Michelle – 7^th grader

After working diligently all the day, Helen got back home tiredly.  She made a decision that she wanted to soak in the hot bath tub which could ease her weariness.  Enjoying this quiet moment, meanwhile, she saw a cockroach crawling on the wall.  Even if Helen was afraid, she still took a slipper which is on the floor and get ready to hit the cockroach.  She jumped up and wanted to give the cockroach a fetal attack.  But she didn’t know that she was in danger.  Her body lost the balance and fell down into the tub.  Everything in the bathroom is chaotic state.

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A Cockroach on The Wall (by 7^th grader)

Michelle – 7^th grader

After working hard at the office all day long, Helen got back to her apartment tiredly.  She made a decision that she wanted to soak herself in the hot water in the bath tub which could ease her weariness and gave her a moment of peace.  Enjoying this quiet moment, she saw a cockroach crawling on the wall.  Although Helen was afraid, she still took one of her slippers beside the tub and got ready to hit the cockroach.  She jumped up and wanted to give the cockroach a fetal attack.  But she didn’t know that she was in danger because she lost her balance and fell down into the tub.  Water, splashing out of the tub, was everywhere.  However, the cockroach was gone, and the bathroom was a mess.  Helen never thought it would turn out like that.