英文寫作 – A Bump

 

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A Bump

Jerry Han – the twelfth grader

 

“It’s my life! I gonna live forever …,” my favorite song was played loudly by my headset, I walking down the street. With my lunch box in right hand and a novel in the other, I was on the way to school. Walking was so boring that I put on my headset and read the novel.

 

Bumping into a big person, while I was humming. The man was not so much a giant as a wall. My lunchbox was inverted and my pork chops were all pour away. I bursted into tears severely for my poor pork chops as if I got lost. The man I crashed into stood helplessly and glared at me. There was nothing he could do but ask my parents’ phone numbers and called them.

 

With his horrible noise, my mom thought I was kidnapped. After knowing the truth, she said sorry on behalf of me. Mom let the man go immediately and blamed me for carless walking with headset and novel. Consequently, I was punished by not having lunch that day.

 

 

[ 修改後 ]

A Bump

Jerry Han – the twelfth grader

 

“It’s my life! I gonna live forever …,” my favorite song was played loudly through my headsets, I walking down the street. With my lunch box in one hand and a novel in the other, I was on the way to school. Walking alone was so boring that I put on my headsets and read the novel.

 

Happily humming without looking ahead, I accidentally bumped into a big guy who was not so much a giant as a wall. My lunchbox fell upside down toward the ground, and my pork chops were all poured out. I bursted into tears and cried bitterly for my poor pork chops as if I lost my beloved. The man I crashed into stood helplessly and glared at me. There was nothing he could do but ask my parents’ phone numbers and called them with his horrible voice. My mom first thought I was kidnapped. After knowing the truth, she said sorry to the man on behalf of me. Mom let the man go immediately and blamed me for carless walking with headsets on my head and a novel in my hand. Consequently, I was punished by not having lunch that day.

 

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