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學測指考英文寫作 – A Donut Store (by 10th grader)

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A Donut Store

Jackie Lee – the 10th grader

After school, Nick was so tired that he couldn't walk anymore, he sat on the bench, which was in front of the Donut Store. The moment he saw the Donuts Store, he felt hungry. He decided to buy a donut to eat. Nick falled in a long line to wait for his donut. He thought of the delicious and yummy donut all the time when he was in line.

Finally, the next one was Nick. But an unbelievable thing was happen. The customer who was ahead of Nick bought the last twenty donuts. When the clerk told Nick that there were no donuts could bought, Nick was very disappointment.

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A Donut Store

Jackie Lee – the 10th grader

After school, Nick was so tired that he couldn't walk anymore and sat on a bench which was in front of a Donuts Store. The moment he saw the Donuts Store, he felt hungry. Then he decided to buy some donuts to eat. He stood at the end a long line to wait for his donut. While waiting patiently, he thought of the delicious and yummy donut all the time.

Finally, Nick was the next one to buy donuts. But an unbelievable thing happened. The customer who was ahead of him bought the last twenty donuts left on the counter. When a clerk told him that all donuts were sold out, he was very disappointed and left reluctantly.